The American dream is something that everyone seems
to live for; however nowadays it seems to be just that, a dream. We've all had
to make sacrifices in our lives in order to gain some of the things that we
want and in the process it's easy to become a mere shadow of everything that
you were once prideful of about yourself. But what allows us to get to this
point in our life? Eager to accomplish all the goals that we initially had in
place for ourselves we strive to be the best, but there always seems to be
something, or someone that tries to pull us back down. It's gotta be scientifically proven somewhere
that time goes by faster the more fun you are having, but the opposite can
definitely be said for the times that you are bored out of your mind. Night
after night, my sister came home after work with another story to tell
expressing how much she enjoyed her job. I never quite understood if she
actually enjoyed her job that much or she just wanted to rub it in my face
since she knew how I felt about mine. When I think about all the reasons that I
have put up with what had to be the most unpleasant times of my life I realize
that I in fact only had one, and that reason had lost its meaning over time. So,
I decided to do something that I knew I would never be able to take back,
something that would finally liberate me from all of the wrongdoing that I had
experienced for the past two years....I quit.
Word Count: 276
Point: Life is too short to accept something that makes you unhappy.
This seems to be more of a retelling of a event rather than a story. Maybe try to focus on one event of your sister "gloating" about her job that finally cased you to quit. The point is really good though. The beginning of the story is interesting it seems to weigh down the narrative.
ReplyDeleteYour story was very well written, I had no idea where it was going which i enjoyed. Although i've never had to work before i'm sure it would suck to do something everyday you hated. I'm happy you quit and wanted to be happy instead of being miserable.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed hearing this story! A big thing I would do with your essay is splitting it up. Split the story into several paragraphs! One big one can steer a reader away, and we wouldn't want that because it's a great story!
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